Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

Britain and Australia
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a law that a panel of
judges
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case
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should have no access
about
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the suspect’s illegal
records
. Since
this
will give protection to the
person
who was being alleged of the offence. Nowadays, it is believed that
this
practice should be altered and that the board of
judges
should be given all the previous facts before they reach their verdict about the court
case
. I personally believe that it should be abolished to verify if the
person
is a repeat offender ensuring that the jury wouldn’t be biased
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their decision, and it might help with
investigation
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as well. Having access to previous
records
based on facts would help the juries to reach their final judgment.
Firstly
, it would help the
judges
to clarify if the
person
involved has a clean record, or
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person
has similar
records
before. It doesn’t necessarily mean that if the
person
has been involved in several crimes, he/she would automatically be charged
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being guilty as the
judges
practice strict morals up to the highest standard.
For instance
, in the
case
of thief and robbery if the
person
involved has the same
case
before presented that the evidence in court was proven to be true
this
would help the jury to decide what is the best action to take for the
person
to start over and not to repeat his/her crime again in the future.
Moreover
,
this
would be a great help with the investigation.
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previous actions committed by the
person
involved if he/she had any of
it
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would help the investigator to find out why
such
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happened.
For example
, if the
person
involved showed that he has a similar record before they would
further
investigate to make sure
their
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be no
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in the thorough examination.
To conclude
,
while
others
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that transparency of
records
would make the jury
be
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biased, I firmly believe that they practice a high morale standard.
Moreover
, the access
of
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previous
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proven unlawful
records
would lead to a much
effective
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verdict in the court and might help investigators find the root cause of the committed crime as well.
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