In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Do you agree or disagree?
In today’s society, adults must be economically stable. Some people argue that financial management must be taught
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them. Lack of knowledge of where to spend money
can cause economic instability. Therefore
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of an individual, so the ideas of wealth gets
embedded in their minds and they will be able to sustain a monetary stable life.
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