In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Do you agree or disagree?
In today’s society, adults must be economically stable. Some people argue that financial management must be taught
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On one hand, in the world of consumerism, one must know where and where not to invest their money
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money
along with
them. Lack of knowledge of where to spend money
can cause economic instability. Therefore
, wealth management must be taught in
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of an individual, so the ideas of wealth gets
embedded in their minds and they will be able to sustain a monetary stable life.
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On the other hand
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