The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries

The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries
The graph shows information about the number of annual utilizing
water
by various types of
industries
such
as fuel, foods and drinks, machinery, metal, chemicals, paper, and textiles in some nations. As can be seen from the graphs, it is obvious that the highest
water
usage of
industries
is chemicals in both
groundwater
and public supply. In detail, the least
amount
of
water
usage in public supply is fuel and textiles at the same
amount
with 10
while
fuel in
groundwater
uses
water
with 70 or
amount
of seven times and textiles with 80 or
amount
of eight times as public supply. Looking at details, the highest annual utilised
water
by
industries
is chemicals in both
groundwater
and public supply, with 430 and 240 respectively. Machinery which uses
water
in public supply is ten times as in
groundwater
, with composed 100 to 10. In conclusion,
groundwater
is the main source for most
industries
, except food/drinks and machinery.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, industries, groundwater, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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