The topic of this: Currently, most students are studying only mathematics and the world language, English. What do you think its advantages more than its disadvantages?

Nowadays
lots
of
student
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in the world started to
studying
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study
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manily
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mainly
two
subjectes
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subjects
, which in
Mathematics
and
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the world
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world
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world's
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main language which is
english
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English
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.
Students
having
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have
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lots
of advantages and
disadvantages
when
students
Studying these two subjects.
Firstly
, every student
have
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has
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to
study
maths
beacause
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because
, studying maths and getting
the
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mathematic
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mathematics
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knowledge gives
lots
of advantages to them.
Currently
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we can't stay In
this
wold
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world
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without knowing maths. Studying
mathematics
give
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gives
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lots
of jobs to
lots
of
students
and
also
to adults
too
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. And
also
studying
english
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is the main thing. Because nowadays
lots
of people
starts
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to communicate in
engish
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English
.
Also
we need to
knowing
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know
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emglish
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English
give
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gives
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lots
of benificts
sush
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such
as, when we are traveling to another country we need to read instructions, we need to
comunicate
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communicate
in
english
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at the airport, and
also
even when we need
a
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help after
arrived
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to
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a new country, we can communicate with other people in
english
and ask for a help too. So studying
mathematics
and studying
english
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English
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gives
lots
of
benifics
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benefits
to
students
and
everyonein
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everyone in
this
word
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world
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.
On the other hand
, studying only
mathematics
give
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has
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some
disadvantages
too. there are
lots
of subjects to
study
in
this
world. so we need should not
study
only
a
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one subject. For
an
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example,
is
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if
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there is a student who wants to become a doctor in the future,
then
he
don't
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doesn't
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need
lots
of
mathematics
knowledge to him. He mainly
need
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needs
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study
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to study
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which he
want
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wants
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such
as
biologhy
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biology
. So studying only
mathematics
also
give
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gives
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some
disadvantages
and
also
,
studying
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and studying
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only
english
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English
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also
give
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gives
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some
disadvantages
.
Students
need to
study
2-3
languages
such
as
english
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English
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, french,
chainess
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Chinese
, ... Because
,
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there are some people in some
sountries
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countries
that they don't know much in
engkish
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English
but they can understand and communicate in french or some other few
languages
. So without knowing only
english
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English
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,
students
need to
study
another extra 2-3
languages
too. In conclusion,
i
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I
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can say that studying
mathematics
and
english
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English
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only
give
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have
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some
disadvantages
. So
students
need to
study
other
languages
too in their
life
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lives
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.
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