Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immifartion? To what consequenes can it lead?
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immigration
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low
standard of living in Correct article usage
the low
home
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the home
better
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a better
life
in his own nation, there are always some unwritten rules which, are making him to
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life
so he has to face whith
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find
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finds
better
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a better
place
to live in.Another reason for this
action
is, running away from the past to start new
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a new
life
in the future. for example
, many people
are running away from the Middle-east
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place
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new
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a new
life
as new person. As can be seen
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seen,
immigration
can really cause
huge change in peoples
lives.
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people's
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important result of Add an article
A most
The most
this
action
is cultural mis-understanding
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misunderstanding
such
as problems in marketing and business. because each place
has its own traditional culture for doing jobs and business,immigration
can make this
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these
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this
situation can some times
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sometimes
people
dont
understand each other and even Correct your spelling
not
cause
a fight. Another important cause
of immigration
is having more than enough population
in target
country.Add an article
the target
For example
, in the USA native people
are already more than Correct article usage
the governments
governments
handling size so if Fix the agreement mistake
government
this
country gets some refuges
it will Correct your spelling
refugees
cause
too many problem
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problems
such
as traffic and lack of homes. So some times
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sometimes
Countrys
leaders should stop Correct your spelling
country
immigration
to make sure native
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the native
population
can handle it self
because of their too much Correct your spelling
itself
population
.
In conclusion, immigration
happens because of Low standards of life
or starting new fresh life
in new
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a new
the new
place
. this
action
can cause
both cultural mis-understanding
and too much unnecessary Correct your spelling
misunderstanding
population
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people
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