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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

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With the rise of social
media
 platforms
people
 could easily
to
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vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. I want to talk about its consequences and its benefits in
this
 essay. Nowadays, many
people
 are active on various social
media
 platforms, from teenagers to the elderly.
This
 issue increased the range of communication between
people
and
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made many things easier and sped up the work. One of the uses of social
media
 is to express
people
's dissatisfaction and complaints about various issues.
For
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 when a problem like high prices in
the
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society occurs,
people
 can easily complain on social
media
 and express their opinion. In my opinion, the consequence of
this
 issue is to damage public opinion.
This
 matter is appropriate in some countries where governments pay attention to ordinary
people
 but In a dictatorial society,
this
 issue creates insecurity for the
people
 and they are interrogated by the government. Yes, in some conditions and some countries it can lead to reform or even progress. After examining
people
's protests on social networks, the government thinks that it is better to solve the problems of
the
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society. I think that in some situations using social
media
 to express complaints is a good option but in some countries
due to
 security issues, it may cause problems for
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accountability
  • Public venting
  • Reputation management
  • Social media platform
  • Complaining culture
  • Community solidarity
  • Conflict resolution
  • Entitlement
  • Direct communication
  • Customer service
  • Exposure
  • Misinformation
  • Amplification
  • Systemic issues
  • Constructive feedback
  • Online atmosphere
  • Negative content
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