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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about the
range
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 of annual salary of
the
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United States families in 2007, 2011 and 2015
also
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 income is divided into five brackets.
Overall
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 People with the lowest and the highest money that are paid are the major part of the public. Noticeably, the
Range
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 of more than $100000 was the main proportion in 2007 and 2015,
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 the US was filled with nearly 30 million rich households in 2011.
Range
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 of more than $100000 have the main proportion in 2007 and 2015
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 the $25000- $49999 takes the major shares.
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, it had an increase in 2015 and reached more than 32 million.
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,the poor society rose in 2011 and
then
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 they had a slight fall in the numbers in 2015.
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, the median income remained unchanged during those years. The middle
range
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 was close to 20 million and it did not change over time.
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, the least-populated bracket had some fluctuations and
finally
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, it reached 15000000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words range with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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