The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
The data above illustrates the total
waste
of three companies from 2000 to 2015. In general, we can see trend differences among the three companies in 15
years
.
Company
A
produce
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less
waste
as the
years
goes
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by. Meanwhile, the graph of
Company
B shows a fluctuation, it goes up in the first five
years
and
then
extremely down after 2005.
In contrast
,
Company
C is
a
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the
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largest
waste
production
company
,
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and their
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their
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its
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amount of
the
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apply
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waste
is increase
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every year. The number of the
waste
is vary
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is varied
is varying
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among the three factories. The first
company
, A,
hits
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it is
highest
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the highest
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level at 12
tonnes
in 2000 and
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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lowest point at under 9
tonnes
in 2015.
Besides
that,
Company
B showing up and down
waste
production gets the peak in 2005 at around 10
tonnes
.
This
total is similar
with
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the total
waste
production by
Company
C in 2015 which is
also
their peak point.
Although
the graph of
Company
C
rise
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has risen
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over the
years
, they ever produce the lowest
waste
roughly at 4
tonnes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste production
  • company
  • trends
  • significant
  • fluctuations
  • surges
  • reductions
  • correlations
  • environmental policies
  • technological advancements
  • units of measurement
  • time period
  • stability
  • milestones
  • graph analysis
  • pattern recognition
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