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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates how many tourists visited Caribbean islands over a
period
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 of seven years.
Overall
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, it is evident that
people
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 became more interested in visiting
this
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island
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 during the
period
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 mentioned. At
first,
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people
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 were more drawn to stay on the
island
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,
however
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, by the end of the
period
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, they
more
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preferred to stay on cruise ships. It can be observed from the chart that the total number of
people
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 who visited the
island
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 witnessed a moderate increase over the entire
period
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. Between 2010 and 2015, the figure grew to approximately 2.75
million
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visitors
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, after which it remained almost constant until 2016. In the subsequent years, the corresponding figure increased rapidly by nearly 0.75
million
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 until 2017. In 2010, the number of
visitors
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 who chose to stay on the
island
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 was more than that of
people
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 who wanted to stay on cruise ships. In the next five years, both figures reached nearly 1.75
million
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visitors
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. Interestingly, from 2016 onwards, the number of
visitors
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 choosing to stay on cruise ships exceeded and reached 2
million
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 by the end of the
period
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,
whereas
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 the figure for
visitors
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 staying on the
the
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island
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 stood at 1.5
million
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 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, people, island, million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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