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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The map below
give
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 information about changes
of
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in
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a
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apply
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public
libery
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libraries
 between 20 years
age
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 and now.
Overall
,there were four rooms in the corners and
it is clear that
 there were significant changes in the types of rooms, and the tables and chairs disappeared totally. There were some
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 changes in
applications
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the applications
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 of the rooms.
For instance
,
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the chlidren's
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chlidren's
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children's
 books
has
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 been replaced with a lecture room
also
 a cafe which is
at
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on
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right
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the right
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 side of
entrance
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the entrance
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 has
bee
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been
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build
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instead
 of
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an
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enquiry desk .
Moreover
,a new
children
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children's
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 fiction has
relocate
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 to the
north-west
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northwest
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of
entrance
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the entrance
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 door and a new computer room is placed in
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the south
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south west
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south-west
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.
On the other hand
, the middle has
has
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been developed in terms of appearance.There were tables and chairs in
middle
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the middle
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 of the
libery
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library
liberty
however
, in
modern
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the modern
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design
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 there are removed and
instead
 of that three self-service machines with
a
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inforamtion
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information
 desk are added.
In addition
,the adult fiction books that
was
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in
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on
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 the left side
has
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have
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 been demolished and today it is a place for
the
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apply
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reference books.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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