The pie chart show the nutritional consistency of two dinners.
The given pie charts reveal the comparison of nutritional that contained in two different
kind
of foods: Change to a plural noun
kinds
medium
baked potato
and macaroni
. Both of
foods have Change preposition
apply
each
rates of carbohydrates, protein, glucose, saturated fat, and other nutrients that Correct determiner usage
apply
does
not explained. Those two dinners have a high level of carbohydrates, which dominated the Verb problem
are
overall
percentage.
Medium
baked potato
and macaroni
are both predominated by carbohydrates, which are more than a third (35%) and more than a half (52%) respectively. On the other hand
, protein content in medium
baked potato
is bigger than in macaroni
, which are
a quarter (25%) and more than one in ten (11%). Change the verb form
is
Moreover
, medium
baked potato
and macaroni
have a wide gap on
the level of saturated fat, which at only one in ten for the Change preposition
in
potato
and 21% contained in macaroni
.
Furthermore
, glucose
Correct article usage
the glucose
level
Fix the agreement mistake
levels
that
contained in both dinners Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
almost Change the verb form
is
have
the same amount. It Unnecessary verb
apply
is
accounted Unnecessary verb
apply
15
% Change preposition
for 15
in
Change preposition
of
Add an article
a medium
medium baked
Add a hyphen
medium-baked
potato
and 11% Fix the agreement mistake
potatoes
in
Change preposition
of
macaroni
. However
, other nutrients that does
not explained in the figure contained 15% in Verb problem
are
medium
baked potato
and only 5% in macaroni
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medium, potato, macaroni with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "explained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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