The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented
pie
charts delineate the changes in the proportion of callers in the Ashodown Museum
while
the table shows the numbers of callers after and before the innovation. At first glance, we analyse that clearly the satisfied dominate every
pie
chart with the highest rates.
On the other hand
, percentages of no responses remained stable and it was
this
rate that made their positions the lowest in both
pie
charts. When we look at all titles, as numbers of visitors increase ,it can be clearly seen that the innovations have been effective in the museum. It is explicitly observed that changes in very satisfied and dissatisfied are quite different. In the first
pie
chart , very satisfied had the third highest percentage with fifteen in every hundred
while
the
dissatisfed
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dissatisfied
preserved forty travellers in every hundred,
however
, after the following year, satisfied caught a downward tendency ( from %30 %to 40) .
Likewise
,
dissatisfied's
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dissatisfaction
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rates went down abruptly (from %40 % to 15) .
Therefore
, no response and very
dissatisfied
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dissatisfaction
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intersected at the identical proportion ( five in every one hundred).
Furthermore
, very dissatisfied never dominated the charts because , before the changes, it had only one-tenth .
Overall
, Rises were satisfied and very satisfied
in contrast
to dramatic decreases of very-dissatisfied and dissatisfied.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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