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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below illustrates the two possible
area
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areas
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 for
new
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a new
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 supermarket (S) that will be developed in Garlsdon which has
65,000
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a 65,000
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 population.
Overall
, the supermarket is planned to be located in the countryside (S1) and in the town centre (S2). The details look of the map shows that the first future development of a new supermarket (S1) will be located in
countryside
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the countryside
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. The area is 12 kilometres away from Hindon which has 10.000 total population.
This
 location is
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 the west side of Garlsdon. The option of transportation to the site is by train or other vehicles. In the same way, the second option of location
also
 has easy access as the first one. Its place
also
 has
railway
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 and main roads. But,
this
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 options
near
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from
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Bransdon and Cransdon which have more population,
15,000
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of 15,000
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 and 29,000.
Moreover
, the place is surrounded by housing and industry
area
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 which
also
 gives more
possibility
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possibilities
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of
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for
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 consumers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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