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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

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I believe that living in a
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 where we have to speak another unfamiliar foreign language can cause serious social
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 and practical
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 too. Everything that's happening in
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 world is because of the
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communication
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every problem that occurs in the day to day life. If
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 fails
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 a poor knowledge of the language
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we face serious
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. The problem that happens because of
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 poor knowledge of
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 can result in different types of
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, because of
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 matter the people around us might misunderstand
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what we're going to say and sometimes you won't be able to fulfil your needs
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 matter. because we don't know how to ask and buy out needs. We'll be lonely because we can't make any friends or new connections with people and it will cause
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mental stress situation. Every living being needs to express their feelings and tough with their own speeches. As humans it can cause
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 to find a job, students
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etc. That's why learning the languages that we have to use in a foreign
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the
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countries are
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 for
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 process to work or study in the
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. Because of that, we can see how important to know the language of a foreign
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Your essay makes an attempt to engage with the prompt, but it does not develop the point sufficiently. You should make clear and comprehensive statements that fully address all parts of the task. Consider expanding on your ideas and be sure that your response is complete and fully answers the question posed.
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The essay lacks a clear logical structure, which results in difficulty following the arguments presented. It is critical to structure your essay with a clear introduction that states your main argument, followed by coherent paragraphs, and a conclusion that summarizes your points. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas flow logically from one to the other.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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