The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The graph below shows details about the exact amount of the total population in four Asian
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living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with Correct your spelling
countries
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a forcast
forcast
for 2030 and 2040.
The Graph clearly shows in 1970 the lowest Correct your spelling
forecast
popuplation
is Indonesia Correct your spelling
population
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just
percent
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per cent
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one is Thailand which is Change the article
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just
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are Thailand
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the Philipines
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Philippines
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show the same amount of nearly 30 Correct your spelling
which
percent
.
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per cent
years
all of the four Asian Add a comma
years,
coutries
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countries
the
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a
are
appeared different amount of populations. There is a boom in Malaysia's Unnecessary verb
apply
populations
and it Fix the agreement mistake
population
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continuously
continously grown
to 90 %. Add the auxiliary verb
has continously grown
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hand,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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per cent
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in
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such
as Thailand and Indonesia have a staible
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stable
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to 60 Change the spelling
per cent
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conclusion
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is
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stable
grows
in all of the four Asian countries.Replace the word
growth
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