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Band 4

Nowadays, people have developed poor eating habits and do not eat balanced diet. What are the reasons behind this? Suggest possible solutions to control this.

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Introduction
Today, society
have
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has
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 improved poor eating habits and
do
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does
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 not take
balanced
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a balanced
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 diet on their daily intake.
Body paragraph 1
This
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 essay will try to identify the
contributing
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contribution
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of
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to
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this
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 and
also
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 explain some solutions that may emerge to
this
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.
Body paragraph 2
There are so many causes behind
this
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 bad
habits
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habit
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eating
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of eating
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, one of them is
time
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 management. adults who
working
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work
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 more than 5 hours in 5
day
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days
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 a week, usually do not have
time
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 to prepare their own
meal
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meals
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.
Instead
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buy
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of buying
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 the healthy
food
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 on their
groceries
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grocery
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 list, they take
short
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the short
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 way by buying fast
food
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 and
keep
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keeping
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 it in the fridge for a
couple
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couple of
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 days.
For instance
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, Bankers who
working
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work
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 from 9 to 5
everyday
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apply
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substitute their
time
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 to go to
supermarket
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the supermarket
a supermarket
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 to
hanging
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hang
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 with friends like visiting new places or going to the cinema.
Body paragraph 3
The
alternatife
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alternative
solutions
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solution
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, if the
proffesionals
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professionals
 do not have
time
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 to buy fresh
food
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, they can use the delivery
servise
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service
that
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apply
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provided by
supermarket
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the supermarket
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. Not only save
a
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apply
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time
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, but
also
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its
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apply
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quite simple
then
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 quick, so by
click
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clicking
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 and
check
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checking
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 out at mall web page
its
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it's
it is
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 done in 5 minutes.
for example
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, The accountant
in
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at
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 the end of the month,
due to
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overload
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the overload
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 of
closing
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the closing
a closing
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book
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books
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they
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apply
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can order some vegetables and fruits only by visiting
market
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the market
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in
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on
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
Conclusion
in conclusion, the reason
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for poor
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poor
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for poor
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 eating habits and
do
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apply
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not
consume
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consuming
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a balanced
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balanced
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a balanced
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 diet is
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the lack
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lack
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the lack
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 of
time
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to
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for
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to
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prepare
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preparing
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food
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,
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then use
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Using
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 modern
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applications
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application
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applications
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 or web
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browsers
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browser
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browsers
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 to buy
healhty
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healthy
 groceries is the
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perfect
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perfectly
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perfect
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 way to tackle
that
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those
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issue
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issues
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issue
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.

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task response
The essay does not fully address all parts of the task. Ensure that the response includes a clear discussion of the reasons behind poor eating habits and fully developed solutions to the issues presented. Each part of the prompt should be addressed equally and thoroughly.
coherence
The essay lacks cohesion in some parts, causing a fragmented flow of ideas. Work on linking sentences and paragraphs more effectively through the use of cohesive devices and transition words.
cohesion
Main points are present but not strongly supported. Aim to develop each point with specific details, examples, or explanations that clearly relate to the central argument and topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • poor eating habits
  • unhealthy food
  • fast food
  • convenience
  • advertising
  • nutrition
  • financial constraints
  • emotional eating
  • peer pressure
  • hectic work schedules
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • junk food
  • processed food
  • nutrient-rich
  • obesity
  • health consequences
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