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The maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the shopping
centre
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, Southside, in its current form and its proposed expansion.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the plan is to extend the
centre
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 and its car
park
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 into nearby green space to allow for more stores and a greater focus on fashion at the expense of eateries and space for activities. Currently, Southside
plaza
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Plaza
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 consists of only a supermarket, department store, cinemas, a noodle shop and cafe with a children's play area and toilet facilities. To the east of the
centre
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, there is a golf course that backs onto a
park
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,
while
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 to the south, there is a fitness
centre
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 and a car
park
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 opposite the shopping mall entrance.
According to
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 the proposal, only the supermarket, toilet and entrance will remain at the original site. The most significant development will be the extension of the mall in an easterly direction, where it will overtake land previously occupied by the golf course and
park
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. The fitness
centre
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 too will be demolished to make way for the car
park
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 which will more than double in size. Inside the mall itself,
although
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 the proposed renovation will allow for more stores, including fashion boutiques and shoe stores, the department store will remain, increasing in size and acquiring its entrance. A cosmetics and gift shop will be added,
as well as
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 a beauty salon. There will,
however
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, be nowhere to eat as plans show the cafe will become an information
centre
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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