The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information about fresh
fish
supplies in Perth, Australia during the years
of
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2004-2014. Generally, Perth's fresh
fish
were supplied from two sources, the local catches and imports and for a 10-year
period
the local
fish
dominated the market.
Firstly
, Perth's fresh
fish
resources gradually increased during the 2004-2010
period
,
started
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with 3142 metric tons (
MT
) in 2004 and
finished
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finishing
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at 8035
MT
in 2010.
However
, the trend
then
decreased in 2012 and remained stable for 2013-2014 around 5800
MT
. Around 70 to 80% of
fish
were caught by local fishermen compared to around 20% of
fish
were imported.
Secondly
, the local catches showed a positive trend for
2004
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the 2004
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-2009
period
. The
fish
supplies started with just 2677
MT
in 2004 and reached the highest production with 7844
MT
in 2009. After that, the local catches decreased to just 6831
MT
in 2010 and continued
stable
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around 4000-5000
MT
for the
last
3 years. The imported
fish
production
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was
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increased significantly during 2004-2010 but for the 2011-2013
period
the production was stable
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at
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in
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1000-1200
MT
and finished with just 782
MT
in 2014.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, period, mt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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