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Is it good for children to start using a computer at a young age? Give the advantages and disadvantages of doing this.

#children #computer #age
the world has changed and that includes the internet and
computers
 . at an early
age
 is it good for children to start using
computers
 and spend long hours on them.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
this
. there are many advantages to using
computers
 from an early
age
.
first,
it is excellent to
learn
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 the child how to
use
computers
.
due to
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 it will teach the children to depend on themselves.
also
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 it is
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important because
 by
the
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computers
 they can search and find good websites.
Second,
learning how to
use
computers
 is very
usefull
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useful
 for their
futurw
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future
.
Nowdays
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 people need
computers
 for many reasons .
for
example
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 people need it for their jobs.
Also
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 students need it to do research
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a masters
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masters
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 degree. Third and
finally
,
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computers
 are one of the best ways to
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learn
 and educate.
Yhe
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The
 kids now live a different life than the one in the
pasr
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past
. Back
then
 when the students did not understand a lesson they had to ask the teacher .
However
, now they can search on the internet
about
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 any lesson and they can find it.
However
,
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 are
som
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some
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 disadvantages to using
computers
 from an early
age
.
First,
using
the
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computers
 can be a waste of time .
for
example
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 the kids can
plat
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play
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 and do some exercise
instead
 of using the
computers
 for a long time .
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 it is bad because
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watching
 screens can damage their eyes.
Second,
they may watch
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are
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 not appropriate for their
age
 . There are many websites
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a
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videos that no one should see
likr
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like
 killing videos and others, at an early
age
 kids should be learning how to
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 with a pen not how to
use
computers
 .
Thus
 when
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they
the
 learn to
use
computers
, they will not be excited about learning how to write with a pen. In
conclusion
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 it is clear to see that there are many advantages to using
computers
 from an early
age
.
However
, it is
also
 true that there are
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 serious disadvantages.
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introduction
Ensure your introduction clearly states your position and outlines the structure of your essay. Your introduction did provide a preview of the advantages and disadvantages to be discussed.
logical structure
Use paragraphing effectively to separate ideas. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that the sentences following it expand or explain that point.
coherence cohesion
Employ linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs. This will ensure smooth transitions and aid in the logical flow of your essay.
conclusion
In your conclusion, reiterate your position and summarize the main points of your argument. Ensure that your conclusion reflects the information presented within the body of the essay.
task achievement
For task achievement, address all parts of the task sufficiently. This includes fully exploring the advantages and disadvantages related to the essay question.
idea development
Formulate your ideas with clarity and develop them comprehensively, providing relevant examples where suitable. You've touched on several points, but most remain under-developed.
specific examples
Back up your main points with specific examples or evidence. While you provided some examples, they were quite general. More detail would enhance your argument's effectiveness.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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