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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart gives us information about the
number
 of
households
 in
millions
 in
US
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the US
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 by their annual revenue in three
yeas
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years
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.
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Overall
overall
 it can be seen that the
number
 of householders who had more than 100 000 income
were
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was
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increasing ,
also
 those who had income between 25 and 49 declined.  regards to two
type
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types
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 of income
who
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apply
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the
number
 of
households
have
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has
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changed , the
amout
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amount
 of
households
were
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was
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 under 30
millions
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million
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for these people who had had more than 100,000 dollars. in 2007
this
number
 was over 25
millions
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million
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for these individuals who had 25 to 49
mllions
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million
millions
 dollars.
however
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however,
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these
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this
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 total was slightly increased in 2011 for 25 ,49 revenue
in contrast
 for people who had more than 100.000 $ dropped
of
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. on top of that the
numbert
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number
 of householders who
hade
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had
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 100.000 $
have
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has
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 reached
dramaticaly
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dramatically
to
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apply
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over 30
millions
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million
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. refers to the
number
 of
households
who
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whose
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the
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apply
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numbers
were remain
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remained
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 unchanged
such
 as
who
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those who
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hade
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had
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50,00 to 74 $
also
 75 000 $
revanus
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revenues
revenue
. even though
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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