The pie chart below compare the water usage in San Diego, Carniforlia, and the rest of the world

The pie chart below compare the water usage in San Diego, Carniforlia, and the rest of the world
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pie graphs
illustrates
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the percentage of
the
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water
consumption in San Diego, California, and in all of the
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using three different fields, namely, residential, industry, and agriculture.
Overall
, as is obviously shown in the pie charts, the agricultural segment
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the largest amount of
water
usage
in all categories,
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, people
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less
water
in the industrial field. Regarding
usage
of
water
in the first figure, which is San Diego, humans’ needs of
water
usage
in residential witness the largest rate, at 60%.
However
, the industrial segment uses
water
in
this
country just around 23%.
This
is followed by the
last
category which is
agricultural
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field, at about 17%.
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,
this
field
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for 69%
in
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the whole world and
this
proportion is considered
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the
most higher
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one among all categories.
On the other hand
, the lowest percentage of
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water
usage
is 8% and
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for residential in the globe.
In addition
, California experiences approximately the same rate of
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water
consumption in all categories. It uses 39% for residential, followed by 33% for industrial
usage
, and 28% for agriculture.
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