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The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Two
 maps show the change in industrial and housing
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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 for employees The
future
Correct word choice
apply
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future
 development sees changes to
factory
Correct article usage
the factory
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,
road
 layout, housing, and public facilities.
Factory
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The factory
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 is the only building in
this
 industrial
area
 right now.
Then
, it will be demolished and will be replaced by housing
of
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for
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 employees. There will be seven housing blocks which are
spreat
Correct your spelling
split
 in
this
area
 with
two
type
Change to a plural noun
types
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 of housing, small and big. The next main change is
road
Correct article usage
the road
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 layout. At
first,
there is only one roundabout,
whereas
 in the
future
 there will be one smaller roundabout in the south. Between those, there will be a medical
center
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centre
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 and shops as the public facility. If we go to the east from the big roundabout, we will find the
two
 small housings and playground
in
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on
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 the left
side
 and we will see a big housing
in
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on
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 the right
side
. The
last
 facility in
east
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the east
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area
 will be the school
at the end
 of
this
road
.
In
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On
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 the north
side
, we will go from the big roundabout. We will see a small housing
in
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on
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 the left
side
 and
then
, go
stright
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straight
form
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from
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 the big roundabout, there will be built a junction across the river as
an
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apply
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access to the next big housing block which is located on the farmland. The
last
 changes
in
Add a missing verb
are in
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 the
west
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western
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area
. There will be
two
 small housing blocks, one on the right
side
from
Change preposition
of
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 the big roundabout and the
last
at the end
 of the
road
.
Lastly
, there are
two
area
Change to a plural noun
areas
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will
Correct pronoun usage
that will
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be still exist
Change the verb form
still exist
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 in the
future
, farmland, river, and town
boandery
Correct your spelling
boundary
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, area, future, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory complex
  • housing area
  • infrastructure
  • transportation links
  • amenities
  • environmental sustainability
  • residential buildings
  • communal facilities
  • work-life balance
  • industrial development
  • urban planning
  • green spaces
  • employee accommodation
  • accessibility
  • layout
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