The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The data given provides information
of
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the
tourists
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tourist's
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number
who visited four different museums in London from June to December
in
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2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
a
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number
of
people
who came to the
museum
fluctuated throughout
an
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the
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observed
period
. It is stagnant in the first two months,
then
spiked in the next month, and eventually slowly decreased until the end of
period
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the period
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. During the
first-two
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first two
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month
period
, three different museums
consist
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of
History
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the History
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, National, and Science
Museum
, experienced a slight decrease respectively at 400,000
visitors
, around 180,000
visitors
, and 400,000
visitors
. Meanwhile,
British
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Museum
was the only
museum
with
constant
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a constant
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number
of
people
at roughly 420,000
visitors
. In the next month,
History
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the History
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and British
Museum
were
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skyrocketed respectively at 600,000
people
, and around 710,000
people
then
experiencing
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experienced
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a gradual
increasing
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until December 2015.
On the other hand
,
National
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the National
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and Science
Museum
fluctuated and they recorded a
number
of
people
at approximately 190,000 tourists, and 300,000
tourist
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tourists
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respectively
at the end
of
given
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a given
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period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, museum, period, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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