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The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. summarize information

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. summarize information
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The maps detail a
school
 floor change in the past which is in 1985 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 time.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that by increasing the number of classrooms, the number of pupils
double
Wrong verb form
doubled
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 over these two years. In 1985,
Entrance
Correct article usage
the Entrance
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 and exit were upon the
car
 park
in
Change preposition
at
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 the most northern point of
school
Correct article usage
the school
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. There
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 an office and a library on the west
side
, in which
office
Correct article usage
the office
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 was
lane
Correct article usage
a lane
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 separating and
along with
 parking.
In addition
, there were two
car
 parks
by
Change preposition
of
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 different
size
Fix the agreement mistake
sizes
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.
The
Change preposition
On the
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 southern
side
 of the
school
, the playing
fields
 had been constructed,
whereas
, slightly less than half of the
school
 was allocated playing
fields
. There were two
classroom
 buildings, and
the
Correct article usage
apply
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one
 had 2 floors was located on the right
side
,
another
Correct word choice
and another
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one
 was in the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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. after
reconstructed
Wrong verb form
reconstructing
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 the
school
 presently, the majority part of
playing
Correct article usage
the playing
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fields
 has
removed
Add a missing verb
been removed
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 in
a
Correct article usage
apply
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favor of fitness, pool, and classrooms.
One
 new
classroom
 between
classroom
Correct article usage
the classroom
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 block and playing
fields
 is increased. The
classroom
 block stays in the same position, just
one
 extra storey is added to it. The third
classroom
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 widened and changed
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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positioned
Change the form of the verb
position
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 from the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 to
west
Correct article usage
the west
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side
. The library has been transformed
to
Change preposition
into
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 learning resources center and computer. The office,
where
Correct word choice
which
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 was next to the library,
remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
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 unchanged,
however
Add the comma(s)
however,
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 the streets and small parking
car
 in the
school
 have been removed, just the large
car
 park remains the same,
although
 there is a change in its shape, transformed from
rectangle
Correct article usage
a rectangle
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 to partial circle and get a little smaller.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, side, fields, classroom, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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