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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitude are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #success #teachers #students’ #attitude
The opinion about the educational success depends on
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 teacher or the
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 is really having
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two different sides. In my opinion,
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educational success
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from
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 how we
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this things
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 to be more functional in the future. It means that
students
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attitude
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 are really important in the first place. If we are more
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 on the
students
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attitude
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 the
students
 become more
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responsibility
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of
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 doing the task and
responsibility
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to
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 learning new things
in
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 academic purposes.
Furthermore
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focus on good
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behavior
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be gives
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 effective communication with the
students
it self
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.
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, both
side
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having
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a very important roles
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A good teachers
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Good teachers
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inspiring
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giving
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knowledges
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also
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 guide the
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students
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attitude
 can make
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 motivated. As far as I am concerned, both good teachers and
students
'
attitude
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giving
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a important roles
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 to make academic success. A symbiotic mutualism can
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academical
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 environment.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has an organized structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use paragraphs effectively to separate your points and improve readability. Consistently use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Focus on fully developing your main points with clear, relevant examples and explanations. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea that is expanded upon with specific information.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task by discussing both views and giving your own opinion. Be clear and explicit, ensuring that your opinion does not contradict the viewpoints discussed and is well-supported by your arguments.
task achievement
Strive to articulate your ideas clearly and comprehensively. Avoid generalized statements and work on providing more depth in your analysis. Each argument should be easy to follow and coherent.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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