14.With computers and the Internet, people can study and work without going to school or a company. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?
Nowadays, learning online and teleworking are the modern alternative ways for studying and working at home using the
internet
and PCs rather than going to schools, universities or firms. There are advantages and disadvantages which Use synonyms
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internet
. First of all, when people are studying or working at their homes virtually, they will reduce using their cars gradually to reach their educational institutes or job destinations. Use synonyms
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fewer gas emissions from vehicles and other transportation methods which depend on fuels and fossils. Linking Words
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, students and employees will save time and feel less depressed Linking Words
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of stuck in traffic jams before reaching their stations. Linking Words
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, students and workers who are going to their schools and companies face huge traffic congestion every day during rush hour except for the weekend days by different methods of public or private transportation. Linking Words
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will make drivers feel more anxious and increase their depression rates which will cause different diseases like heart rate diseases.
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, there are two major disadvantages that humans could be affected by learning or working online. Linking Words
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will lead to loose the ability to continue their tasks and lessons in their classes or jobs. Linking Words
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, online classes and teleworking will have a negative effect on humans' interpersonal skills, Linking Words
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as communication skills and teamwork. Linking Words
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is because of the fewer communication channels and connections between their colleagues. Linking Words
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, traditional offices and lessons encourage communication capabilities for students and workers through face-to-face connections and teamwork.
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internet
and PCs are very essential to people's lives these days. Use synonyms
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happens through virtual lessons and teleworking without reaching firms and colleges. Linking Words
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, there are disadvantages that should be taken into consideration. These could impact their lives badly, like their interpersonal skills and the Linking Words
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technical problems which will affect badly on the productivity of teleworkers.Use synonyms
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