In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
part
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of the world many people tend to change their normal diets to
vegetarian
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diet.
Although
,
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vegetarian
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diet can be advantageous for a healthy
life style
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lifestyle
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, it can
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be harmfull
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harmfull
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harmful
harmfully
for
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to
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the
body
in many ways
due to
lack
of
nutrients
. So I believe having normal non-veg
meal
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can be more beneficial to the human
body
.
Known
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truth is that vegetarian
meals
are
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lack
of
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certain important
nutrients
.
For instance
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that
is
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are
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helpful
to strengthen
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in strengthening
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up
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human muscles are not present in these
meals
. Meats like beef can be more beneficial in creating
hemoglabin
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haemoglobin
whic
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which
is
mor helpfull
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more helpful
to absorb
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iron
to
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our
body
.
Protiens
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Proteins
are more
helpfull
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helpful
in making
human
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the human
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body
strong and fit.
Due to
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reason so many fitness
couches
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also
advice
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their
meals
with
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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dishes like beef and eggs to be
more strong
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stronger
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.
On the other hand
, leading
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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life style
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lifestyle
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can reduce
body's
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the body's
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immunity and some people even reduce their
hemeglobin
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haemoglobin
level
due to
lack
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a lack
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of
nutrients
. As
a
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example, Anemia is a common condition
between
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vegetarian food consumers.
Also
lot
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of them
loose
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their muscle
strenghth
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strength
due to
lack
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a lack
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of
protien
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protein
.
Also
so many of them present with
faintishess
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faintish
and loss of weight. In conclusion, being vegetarian can be disadvantageous in many ways because these
meals
lacks
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some important
nutrients
. So it can be helpful to consume
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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meal
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meals
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to stay strong and healthy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarian diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Animal welfare
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Balanced intake
  • Societal norms
  • Meat-dominant
  • Sustainable living
  • Plant-based proteins
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