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The graph below shows the global demand for different textile fibres between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the global demand for different textile fibres between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph presents interesting information about different textile material requirements between
years
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the years
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 1980 and 2015. The curves present
polyester
,
cotton
,
cellulosic
 and wool
production
. Their amounts are depicted in million
tons
.
Cotton
 fibres had the highest
production
, over 10 million
tons
, in 1980. Its
production
 was followed by
polyester
 ,with numbers around 5 million
tons
, and
subsequently
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subsequently,
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 the lowest numbers were observed in
cellulosic
 and
woll
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wool
. The intensity of textile productivity slightly fluctuated between
years
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the years
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 1980 and 2000. Surprisingly,
production
 of
polyester
 soared in 2000, and its increasing trend continued until 2015.
Also
 in
cotton
 and
cellulosic
 textiles
were
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was
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 possible to observe
slightly
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a slightly
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 less significant rise in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
tons
, and
similarly
 here
also
 persisted the increasing trend. On the opposite,
the
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apply
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wool
production
 declined between
years
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the years
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 2000 and 2015.
To conclude
, textile fibres
production
 of
polyester
,
cotton
 and
cellulosic
 proved continuously
increased
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increase
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 trend since 2000, with
preference
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the preference
a preference
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of
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for
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polyester
,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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the
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apply
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wool
production
 was steadily lower after 2000
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words polyester, cotton, cellulosic, production, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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