The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980

and the year 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males involved in senior
development
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IBM, Microsoft and Apple from 1980 to 2010.
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, all companies saw an increase in their male participation in senior
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ratios,
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, IBM experienced
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drastic growth and became the most
male dominant
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company in the specific area over time. In 1980 and 1985, only minor fractions of the senior
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participation belonged to men in IBM and
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ratio grew gradually to nearly a third in 2000.
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proportion around doubled by 2010, ending the period at just over 60%. Microsoft's male participation in senior
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started at about 6%
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the beginning of the period and
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slowly climbed to roughly 15% in 1995 and 2000 before jumping to around 45%
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of the period. Apple's proportion for senior male participants varied between about %13 and a quarter over time.
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