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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The index above shows the number of
people
 that travelled abroad in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, and 2005.
This
 essay will describe about changing numbers of
people
 that travel abroad within 4 different years. Based on the table, the total of
people
 that do international travel is showing an increase from 1990 to 2005. The number has increased by around 250
million
people
 in total. As the most popular destination was Europe in the year 1990,
then
 surprisingly Europe still maintained its position for consecutive years up until 2005. On the other side, the least preferred destination is the Middle East, with only 9.8
million
 visitors and still the least preferred destination until the year 2005 with 15.8
million
 travellers.
Besides
, almost all of these areas are undergoing positive changes, with Europe as the region that has the most differences in visitors.
However
, the only region that had fluctuating changes in the number of travellers in America, which stably increased its travellers from 1990 until 2000, but showed a decrease of 5
million
 visitors in the year 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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