The graph below shows the global demand for different textile fibres between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the global demand for different textile fibres between 1980 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart delineates the number of
fiber
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fibers
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purchased for 4 various types, namely
polyester
, cotton, cellulosic, and wool from 1980 to 2015. It is conspicuous that in
general
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the total number of
fibers
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bought by their customers increased in these observed periods.
In addition
, it is
insteresting
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interesting
that the data reported the
polyester
soared dramatically;
however
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the wool remained unchanged. Turning to the
polyester
and the cotton, in the first time frame, between 1980 and 1995, the number of cotton demanded
were
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higher than the
polyester
by around 5 million tons.
In contrast
, after 1995
the
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polyester
dominated another category by skyrocketing and reaching a peak at just beneath 70 in 1995. As regards the rest categories, there was a fractional growth in the cellulosic from
by
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approximately 0 to just below 10.
On the other hand
, the wool remained the same by starting and ending at around 2.
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