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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table illustrates the
sources
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 of the
money
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 received from four different
sources
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 to provide for the
police
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budget
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 in 2017 and 2018. The pie charts display the
money
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 distributions of the
police
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budget
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 by three categories between 2017 and 2018 in a particular area of the UK.
Overall
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, the total
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 budgets were not significantly different between 2017 and 2018,
while
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 the majority of the
money
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 came from the National Government. Meanwhile, the
police
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 spent the most
money
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 on their salaries for officers and staff in both 2017 and 2018, and there was a rise in the
money
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 spent on technology in 2018 relative to 2017. In terms of
money
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sources
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, the total budgets accounted for £304.7m and £318.6m in 2017 and 2018. The most
money
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 came from the National Government, at £175.5m and £177.8m,
while
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 there was no noticeable change in Other
sources
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 of the
money
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 received which were 38m and 38.5m.
Furthermore
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, it was around £10m higher than the
money
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 obtained from the Local Taxes in 2018 as compared to 2017, and Local Taxes contributed
money
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 for the
police
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budget
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 at 91.2m and 102.3m in 2017 and 2018, respectively.
Moreover
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, the
police
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 spent 17% of the
budget
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 on buildings and transport in both 2017 and 2018.
By contrast
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, the
police
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utilized
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spent
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 almost double the
money
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 on
the
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technology in 2018 as compared to 2018, it accounted for 8% in 2017 and rose to 14% in 2018. At the same time, the
police
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 remained spending the most
money
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 on their salaries at 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, money, police, budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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