The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
hours
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of sunshine for three different towns, and the line chart gives data about the average temperatures for these
cities
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based on months.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the annual
hours
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of sunshine
for
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in
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New
York
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were higher than
the
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in the
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remaining
cities
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, considering the changes in temperatures regardless of months
London
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and New
York
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showed similar
pattern
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patterns
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during the period. In detail,
according to
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the given
table
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table,
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the residents of New
York
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benefitted from the
sunhine
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sunshine
more than
pther
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other
cities
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, at 2.535
hours
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in that year. New
York
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followed
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by Sydney, whose total
hours
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of sunshine were 2,473.
In contrast
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, the
figure
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for
London
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was significantly lower at 1,180
hours
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in that year, which
almost
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is almost
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half
amount
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the amount
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of time
of
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in
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Sydney. Looking more closely at the line graph, New
York
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and
London
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had similar
trend
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trends
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during the period, both two
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figure
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figures
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peaked in summer times. In January average temperature in New
York
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represented in
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was
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just below 5
degree
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degrees
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, and
London
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’s temperature was almost two times of New
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York
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York's
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.
Then
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these two figures rose, and they showed the same degree
in
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at
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the beginning of April, at nearly 12
degree
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degrees
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. In the following eight
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moths,
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moths
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months
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they showed
similar
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a similar
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pettern
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pattern
patterns
, but the
figure
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for New
York
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was slightly higher than the
figure
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for
London
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. Interestingly, the
figure
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for Sydney was the opposite of the other figures,
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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the differences between the temperatures for the summer and the winter
was
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were
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less than the remaining
cities
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, cities, york, london, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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