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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*- labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The given table shows the figure of Fairtrade-labelled
of
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coffee and
banana
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bananas
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 that
has been
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were
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 sold in the
year
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years
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of
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1999 and 2004. The
number
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numbers
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 were measured in
millions
 of
eurous
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euros
 and presented
into
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 five different
countries
, which were Switzerland,
UK
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the UK
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, Belgium, Sweden and Denmark.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the
sales
 of coffee
was
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increased in all
countries
 during the giving period,
meanwhile
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 trend
sales
 of bananas may vary. In terms of the table of coffee
sales
,
UK
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the UK
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 experienced the highest growth with
the
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 number from 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 1999 and the
figured
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 increased eight times in 2004. Switzerland was
on
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the
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second place,
rise
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 by
doubled
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doubling
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 in 2004
at
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 6
millions
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million
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.
Morever
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Moreover
 Belgium
also
 went up by 0.7
millions
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million
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, to 1.7
millions
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million
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 in 2004. Meanwhile
Demark
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Denmark
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 and Sweden
, was
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 grew by 0.2
millions
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million
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 to 2
millions
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million
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 and 1
millions
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million
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, respectively. Regarding the table of bananas that sold in 1999 and 2004, the
higest
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highest
increased
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 was happened in
UK
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the UK
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, with more than five times, from 1 to 5.5
millions
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million
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.
Furthermore
, Belgium
also
 witnessed a significant rise from 0.6 to 4
millions
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million
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. Meanwhile, Switzerland was
on
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the
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third place and increased more
that
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tripeled
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tripled
 from 15 to 47 between 1999 and 2004. The
last
countries
, Sweden and Denmark,
the
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are the
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 only
countries
 with decreased
sales
, at 1.8 to 1
millions
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million
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 and at 2 to 0.9
millions
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million
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,
severally
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respectively
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, countries, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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