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The graph below gives information about international turist arrivals in different part of the world.

The graph below gives information about international turist arrivals in different part of the world.
The graph shows how many international
turist
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tourist
tourists
 arrived in some different places of the World during 16 years, namely in 1990-2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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number
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the number
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 of Central and Eastern Europe
turist
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tourist
 visits increased drastically through the 16 years. At the same time,
arrivals
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arrival
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growth
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 in South America was moderate with a
less
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smaller
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number
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of turists
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turists
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tourists
 in comparison with all other graphs. Despite
on
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the modest
growth
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, the USA presented the biggest
number
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 of
turists
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tourists
 which arrived during
that
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those
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 16 years. The
number
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 of arrivals in Central and Eastern Europe skyrocketed roughly
tripple
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triple
 times from approximately 31
million
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 people to 87
million
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 in 1990 to 2005 respectively.  The
growth
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 of
the
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apply
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turist's
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tourists's
number
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 who came to South America, showed  figures
roughly
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of roughly
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 7 at the very beginning and 16
million
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 people in 2005. The USA, despite
of
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apply
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the
growth
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 only
on
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apply
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30% showed the biggest
number
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 of arrived
turists
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tourists
, namely close to 89
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, growth, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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