The graph below gives information about international turist arrivals in different part of the world.

The graph below gives information about international turist arrivals in different part of the world.
The graph shows how many international
turist
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tourist
tourists
arrived in some different places of the World during 16 years, namely in 1990-2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that
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the number
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of Central and Eastern Europe
turist
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tourist
visits increased drastically through the 16 years. At the same time,
arrivals
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growth
in South America was moderate with a
less
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smaller
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number
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of turists
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turists
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tourists
in comparison with all other graphs. Despite
on
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the modest
growth
, the USA presented the biggest
number
of
turists
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tourists
which arrived during
that
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those
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16 years. The
number
of arrivals in Central and Eastern Europe skyrocketed roughly
tripple
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triple
times from approximately 31
million
people to 87
million
in 1990 to 2005 respectively.  The
growth
of
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turist's
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tourists's
number
who came to South America, showed  figures
roughly
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of roughly
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7 at the very beginning and 16
million
people in 2005. The USA, despite
of
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the
growth
only
on
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30% showed the biggest
number
of arrived
turists
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tourists
, namely close to 89
million
.
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