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Your ID card has been stolen. Write to the Local Police Station, giving details of who you are what happened ask what you should do to get a new ID card

#id #card #police #station
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to lodge a complaint about my stolen identification
card
. I have been working as a community health officer for the past three years at the health and wellness centre in Brampton. My ID
card
 number is 345B53 with my passport-size photograph on it. I was posted at a health fair organised in The Central Community Hall on May 19 for one day. My job was to check the temperature of every person. I had my ID
card
 in my wallet before the start of
this
 event;
however
, when I was about to leave, I realised that my wallet was missing. I urgently require
this
card
 as I need to submit a copy of
this
card
 to pay for my income tax return within a month. Please guide me about the procedure to apply for the new
card
. For that kindly contact me at my e-mail [email protected]. I am hoping for a prompt reply. Yours faithfully, Amandeep Kaur
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coherence cohesion
While the letter is quite clear, consider breaking down long sentences to enhance readability.
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Ensure to double-check for any minor details that might have been missed, such as full stops at the end of each sentence.
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The letter thoroughly addresses all prompts: who you are, what happened, and what you need assistance with.
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The tone remains formal and suited to the context of addressing a police station.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a logical flow, moving from introduction, explanation of the incident, to the request for assistance.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are proper and polite, fitting for a formal letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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