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The diagrams below show the current and proposed plans of the bathroom of a penthouse

The diagrams below show the current and proposed plans of the bathroom of a penthouse
The diagrams illustrate
about
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the current and prospective plans for
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bathroom
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the bathroom
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 of a penthouse. Looking from the holistic perspective, it is clearly evident that the figure in
proposed
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plan
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 shows more additional rooms than the current
plan
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 whose
room
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design
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 is more simple. From the entry door, the sketch of the current
plan
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 is clear to divide
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bathroom
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the bathroom
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 into three parts. In the right
area
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 from the entry, the part is intended for
mirror
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mirrors
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 and sinks.
Accross
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Across
 from it, the southwest
area
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 is particularly for
shower
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the shower
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room
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rooms
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. The north location of the
bathroom
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 is where the clothes
room
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 of male and female
resident
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residents
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 take place.
While
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on the other hand
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, the proposed
plan
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 will divide the
bathroom
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 into seven parts, including two extra rooms for laundry and
bathub
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bathtub
. The stark difference between both sketches
lie
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on
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in
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 the north
area
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 of the
bathroom
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. The
design
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 in
proposed
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the proposed
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plan
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 will divide the clothes
room
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according to
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 the gender of the residents. The male clothing
room
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 will be located
on
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in
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 the northest
area
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 of the
room
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,
while
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 for the female, the
room
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 will take place in around two per three
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area
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areas
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 of
mirror
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mirrors
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 and sinks from the current
plan
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design
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.
Additionally
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,
between
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the clothes
room
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 in
proposed
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the proposed
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plan
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design
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 will be separated by
laundry
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the laundry
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room
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 and
in
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on
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 the exact south side of it will be located a shower
room
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. Upon
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a detail
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detail
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detailed
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 look of the proposed
plan
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, the
bathub
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bathtub
area
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 will take place in the southwest juncture of the
room
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 using approximately one per three
part
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parts
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 of
shower
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the shower
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area
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 from the current
plan
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 sketch.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bathroom, plan, room, design, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "divide" was used 3 times.
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