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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The graph displays the
number
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 of
hours
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 each
day
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tourists
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 spent on leisure activities
while
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 on Grece in August 2019, and these
tourists
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 came from
China
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, America,
Turki
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Turkey
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, and Brazil.
Overall
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, there are two countries,
China
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 and America, with the highest
number
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 of
hours
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 that
tourists
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spent
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spend
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on
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apply
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reading
books
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. Following that,
Turky
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Turkey
 and Brazil’s
tourists
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 spent the highest
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hours
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number of hours
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 at the beach.
Then
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,
China
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 is the country which has the lowest
numbers
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number
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 of
hours
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 that
tourists
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 spend on visiting places. With 8
hours
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,
China
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 has the highest
number
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 of
hours
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 that
tourists
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 spend on reading
books
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while
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 they
were
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are
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 visiting Greece in 2019.
Subsequently
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, America’s
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tourists
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tourists'
tourist's
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acitvity
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activity
 was reading
books
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, and
this
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 data was the second highest leisure activity with 4
hours
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 per
day
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.
Then
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, the lowest activity
practiced
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practised
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 by
tourists
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 was visiting places for 1 hour per
day
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. Brazil’s
tourists
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 spent the highest
number
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 of
hours
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 at the beach with 8
hours
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 per
day
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while
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 visiting
Grece
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Greece
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. After that, the lowest
number
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 of
hours
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 spent at the coast were
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tourists
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by tourists
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form
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from
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China
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 with 3
hours
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 per
day
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.
Finally
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, the most frequent activities
practiced
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practised
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 by
toursits
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tourists
 were reading
books
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 and visiting the beach
with
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for
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 8 and 6
hours
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 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, day, tourists, china, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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