The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The graph displays the
number
of hours
each day
tourists
spent on leisure activities while
on Grece in August 2019, and these tourists
came from China
, America, Turki
, and Brazil.
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Turkey
Overall
, there are two countries, China
and America, with the highest number
of hours
that tourists
spent
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spend
on
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apply
books
. Following that, Turky
and Brazil’s Correct your spelling
Turkey
tourists
spent the highest hours
at the beach. Correct quantifier usage
number of hours
Then
, China
is the country which has the lowest numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
hours
that tourists
spend on visiting places.
With 8 hours
, China
has the highest number
of hours
that tourists
spend on reading books
while
they were
visiting Greece in 2019. Wrong verb form
are
Subsequently
, America’s tourists
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tourists'
tourist's
acitvity
was reading Correct your spelling
activity
books
, and this
data was the second highest leisure activity with 4 hours
per day
. Then
, the lowest activity practiced
by Change the spelling
practised
tourists
was visiting places for 1 hour per day
.
Brazil’s tourists
spent the highest number
of hours
at the beach with 8 hours
per day
while
visiting Grece
. After that, the lowest Correct your spelling
Greece
number
of hours
spent at the coast were tourists
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by tourists
form
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from
China
with 3 hours
per day
. Finally
, the most frequent activities practiced
by Change the spelling
practised
toursits
were reading Correct your spelling
tourists
books
and visiting the beach with
8 and 6 Change preposition
for
hours
respectively.Submitted by cuevas14dic on
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