The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the comparison planned of a museum in 1998 and a decade later.
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, the whole size of the building and the location of its garden remained unchanged,
while
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there were several changes to allocate the rooms
along with
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an eating space area which had been added to provide
the
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convenience
of
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the visitors. In 1998, when visitors entered the building, there was a temporary exhibition on their left,
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on their right, the bags and coats stored
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toilets could be found. To discover fixed display rooms, people just went to the north-west and the northeast of the museum, divided by a cafe and a huge garden in the centre of the construction. For a ten-year period, guests remained instructed to enter through the same door, despite
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section
was
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on their westside.
In addition
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, spaces for fixed exhibitions were still three,
however
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, they moved away into the whole easterly side of the museum. the location of the cafe remained unchanged, in spite of a slight reduction on its right to add a toilet.
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it was still situated at its navel, several amenities had been constructed inside the park,
such
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as a sitting area and fountains.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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