The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.
The pie chart provided
,
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gives information about the
sales
of
drink
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a drink
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brand called
Coca-Cola
categorized in 5 different areas. The accumulative total of
Coca-Cola
sales
are
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is
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17,1 billion
drink
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drinks
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.
By
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first sight, we can conclude that
Coca-Cola
drink
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drinks
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selling progress seems to
a
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huge success in all
area
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areas
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. North America is the largest
sales
contributor by 30,4%, following that 25,7%
sales
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of sales
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came from Latin America.
On the contrary
, Africa and Middle East
sales
are only around 7%. The line chart delineates the share
price
of
Coca-Cola
. In 1996, the
drink
only cost approximately $32 but the
price
surge
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surged
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up to 50% from the original
price
into
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to
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a
price
close to $70 in 1997 and even
spike
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spiked
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more to
near
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nearly
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$80 in 1998
due to
the rise of demand. After that, the
price
of
Coca-Cola
seem
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seems
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to gradually move in
downtrend
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a downtrend
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. The latest share
price
of
Coca-Cola
in 2001
is
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was
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$55. We can conclude that there are many
enjoyer
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enjoyers
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of
this
drink
brand, the
sales
of the product distributed well across 5
area
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areas
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.
Also
, we can conclude that higher demand led to higher
price
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prices
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but the
Coca-Cola
price
close in 2001 is still below
average
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the average
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of
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for
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the
last
4
year
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years
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, drink, coca-cola, price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • highlight
  • fluctuations
  • correlation
  • trends
  • overview
  • analysis
  • interpretation
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