Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
information
is very easy to access. Most
of
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people read
news
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by phone or computer using their internet connection,
although
newspaper
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is still
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as
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one of the most important
resource
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of
news
. I agree with the statement because today, we can find a lot of
news
with untrusted sources which
lead
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you to the hoax
infromation
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information
. I will explain
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my reasons in the essay below. In
digital
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information
era, communities
are
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easy to get
information
for free from lots of sources on
internet
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. But, one of the issues at
this
time is there are
also
many media that we don't know if the data is valid or not.
As a result
,
the
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unvalid
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invalid
news
causes conflicts
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in
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the grassroots level.
Moreover
, the
information
can
also
harm other parties.
For example
,
news
from
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forwarding
message
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messages
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of
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Whatsapp
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in
this
election period can cause it. Tiding that written in
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the newspaper
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has
a
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validity because the data is collected by
journalist
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a journalist
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.
However
, the
information
from
newspaper
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the newspaper
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charges you with some cost. Today, some
of
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publisher has
move
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from
newspaper
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newspapers
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(print version) to the e-
newspaper
with some option of subscription. So, it will
make
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you having
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to choose
a valid
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information
with an easy way to connect. Kompas and Jakarta Post
is
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two prestigious
newspaper
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newspapers
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in Indonesia that
change
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their lead from paper-based to electronic-based.
To sum up
,
newspaper
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is still
to be
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the most significant
keys
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of
information
. At present, you can access
newspaper
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not only in a print version, but
also
in electronic version.
Consequently
, it makes
you
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easy to read trusted
news
from any device.
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Task Achievement
For task achievement, ensure that the entire question prompt is addressed. While you discuss the importance of newspapers, there is a lack of depth in comparing online news sources. Make sure to present clear arguments for or against the statement clearly and develop those arguments thoroughly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay's logical structure could be improved by planning and organizing ideas more effectively. Make sure to have a clear introductory paragraph, at least two body paragraphs with distinct main ideas, and a concise conclusion summarizing your points.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support each key argument with specific examples and clear explanations. Your example regarding WhatsApp messages in the election period could be expanded upon to demonstrate how newspapers provide validated information in such scenarios.

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