The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts illustrate
employment
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the employment
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status of Australian
students
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after graduating in/their graduation from (sai cấu trúc câu) an Australian school in 3 different periods of time over 20 years.
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, there was an upward trend in the number of
students
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who successfully held
the
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a
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job, the opposite could be seen in the rate of those who pursued higher education. Strikingly, unemployed graduates (n) were always the lowest. Accounting for 50%, learners engaged in advanced learning were the highest.
This
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proportion decreased significantly and
then
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continued to fall slightly to one-third of the total, at 37%.
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, people holding the job experienced a gradual increase
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15% over 20 years. Strikingly,
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number made up half of
students
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in 1990.
Students
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who work full-time contributed
to
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apply
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the most
at the end
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of the observed period,
at
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in
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2000. In 1980, unemployed
students
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took up the modest share, at 10%, which was one-fifth of the highest.
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this
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rate rose moderately over 10 years, it decreased to 8%
at the end
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of the observed period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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