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Task 1 The diagram below shows how instand noodles are manufactured.

Task 1 The diagram below shows how instand noodles are manufactured.
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The given diagram illustrates
production
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the production
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 of instant noodles. It is manifest from the
starage
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storage
 of flour to the labelling and sealing, involving 7 different steps.
Initially
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, flour is stored in storage silos
then
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 added
ingridients
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ingredients
, water and oil in
mixer
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a mixer
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 to prepare for
further
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 steps. Immediately after reaching
desired
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the desired
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 consistency,
dough
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pressed
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is pressed
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 by rollers to get
dough
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 sheets. Following that,
dough
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 sheets are
cutted
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cut
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 onto
dough
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 strips,
then
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 made noodle discs. After
that
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that,
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 it
cooked
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is cooked
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 in oil and dried.
Then
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, dried noodle discs
put
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are put
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 into cups before putting vegetables and spices.
Finally
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, cups
labelled
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are labelled
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 and sealed to be ready
to
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for
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 consumers
consumable
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apply
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.
Overall
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, it is
noteable
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notable
noticeable
 that producing instant noodles is a lengthy and tedious process involving many steps.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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