Task 1 The diagram below shows how instand noodles are manufactured.

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The given diagram illustrates

production

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the production

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of instant noodles. It is manifest from the

starage

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storage

of flour to the labelling and sealing, involving 7 different steps.

Initially

, flour is stored in storage silos

then

added

ingridients

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ingredients

, water and oil in

mixer

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a mixer

the mixer

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to prepare for

further

steps. Immediately after reaching

desired

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the desired

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consistency,

dough

pressed

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is pressed

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by rollers to get

dough

sheets. Following that,

dough

sheets are

cutted

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cut

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onto

dough

strips,

then

made noodle discs. After

that

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that,

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cooked

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is cooked

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in oil and dried.

Then

, dried noodle discs

put

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are put

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into cups before putting vegetables and spices.

Finally

, cups

labelled

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are labelled

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and sealed to be ready

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for

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consumers

consumable

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apply

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Overall

, it is

noteable

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notable

noticeable

that producing instant noodles is a lengthy and tedious process involving many steps.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

119 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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