The diagram below shows how rocks are created and destroyed in the rock cycle

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The illustration shows how rocks are made and demolished in their whole cycle.

Overall

, The cycle starts with the erosion of

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rock

into sand and stones

due to

the rain which creates sediments

as a result

of weather conditions and ends with making

ingeneous

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ingenious

igneous

rock

which creates a large

rock

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The process starts with rain which falls on mountain

rock

surfaces.

Then

the

rock

is eroded and sands and stones fall from the surface to below the water level which creates sediment. next,sediments make a large sedimentary

rock

which

converted

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into Metamorphic

rock

as a

resultof

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result of

high pressure and temperature. After that, Metamorphic

rock

melts into

Magma

whereas

magma

is kept in volcanoes.

Magma

comes out

due to

the volcano eruption as lava.

Furthermore

, lava and

magma

cool down rapidly both produce igneous

rock

which rises slowly to the surface which rises slowly to the surface to complete its cycle.

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