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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is stated by someone that in the future all vehicles
such
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 as cars, buses, and trucks will contain only passengers since
there
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they
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could
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 be driven without human
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driver
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drivers
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. Personally, I believe that the benefits of
driverless
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin
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 with,
driverless
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 vehicles are modern machines that lead to the advantages of
human's
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human
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 life. It is suitable for people who have disabilities.
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, they do not need to call someone or a taxi to go out.
In addition
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, buses and trucks are big machines that have a high risk of incident.
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, if the
driver
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 is an automation,
then
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 it will reduce
number
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the number
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 of
roads accident
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road accidents
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 since there would be automatic sensors.
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, some incidents can be caused by most of the drivers always
drive
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driving
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 during the night
that
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which
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make
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 them feel sleepy. But, the modernism of technology may reduce the high risk of incidents since they will automatically stop if something bad
happends
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happens
.
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, it is clearly obvious that without human
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driver
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drivers
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, it refers to the increase of unemployment. A
driver
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 is a source of income in someone else's life, and the construction of
driverless
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 could limit their money.
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, research in one country
show
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 that
jobs opportunity
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job opportunities
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 will decrease in the future, since there is development of technology.
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, it could be dangerous for all of us. In conclusion,
while
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 there are more benefits of
driverless
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, the disadvantages could
also
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 affect how people will live in the next few years. Vehicles without a
driver
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 should
be use
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 properly.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear overall structure, with distinct and coherent paragraphs leading the reader through the argument.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and cohesive devices effectively to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points more fully with specific, detailed examples and explanations to support your analysis of the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task by giving equal attention to the advantages and disadvantages of the topic, ensuring that your opinion is clear throughout and restated in the conclusion.
task achievement
Clarify and expand your ideas to create a more comprehensive response, making sure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
task achievement
Aim to include a broader range of vocabulary and syntactical structures to articulate your arguments clearly and enhance the quality of your writing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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