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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages

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Hello Aslı, I am writing
you
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to you
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 to share my thoughts about a camping holiday you have asked me
.
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about.
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 I believe my past experience makes me
expert
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an expert
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 on
a
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apply
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holiday camping, and I want to say that you will
spend
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have
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 enjoyable times
particularly
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, particularly
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 in being alone in the forest and
meets
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meeting
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 new friends.
On the other hand
, dealing with non-domesticated animals and cold weather might be challenging for you
initially
, but I am confident you will adapt quickly.
Furthermore
, I have plans to go camping in Datca
this
 year, pending approval from my boss. If he grants permission, I would love to join you.
While
 I await your
possitive
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positive
 feedback, I would be grateful if you could reply to my letter after your
increable
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incredible
 camping
experince
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experience
. If you have any questions or thoughts, please do not hesitate to contact me. Kind regards, Salih Zeki
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Coherence & Cohesion
The letter has a friendly tone which is suitable for writing to a friend. However, you should use proper capitalization and punctuation to improve overall clarity.
Task Achievement
There are several spelling and grammar errors. Make sure to proofread your writing for errors such as 'increable' instead of 'incredible', 'possitive' instead of 'positive', and 'experince' instead of 'experience'.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure that the letter follows a logical structure. Introduce your ideas clearly and develop them in separate paragraphs. Avoid mixing different ideas in the same paragraph.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task evenly. The letter could better explain why a camping holiday would be enjoyable, by giving specific reasons and examples, and by more thoroughly discussing the possible disadvantages.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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