A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages

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Hello Aslı, I am writing

you

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to you

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to share my thoughts about a camping holiday you have asked me

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about.

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I believe my past experience makes me

expert

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an expert

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apply

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holiday camping, and I want to say that you will

spend

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have

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enjoyable times

particularly

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, particularly

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in being alone in the forest and

meets

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meeting

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new friends.

On the other hand

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, dealing with non-domesticated animals and cold weather might be challenging for you

initially

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, but I am confident you will adapt quickly.

Furthermore

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, I have plans to go camping in Datca

this

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year, pending approval from my boss. If he grants permission, I would love to join you.

While

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I await your

possitive

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positive

feedback, I would be grateful if you could reply to my letter after your

increable

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incredible

camping

experince

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experience

. If you have any questions or thoughts, please do not hesitate to contact me. Kind regards, Salih Zeki

Submitted by salihzekikoni on Tue Jan 02 2024

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Coherence & Cohesion

The letter has a friendly tone which is suitable for writing to a friend. However, you should use proper capitalization and punctuation to improve overall clarity.

Task Achievement

There are several spelling and grammar errors. Make sure to proofread your writing for errors such as 'increable' instead of 'incredible', 'possitive' instead of 'positive', and 'experince' instead of 'experience'.

Coherence & Cohesion

To improve coherence, ensure that the letter follows a logical structure. Introduce your ideas clearly and develop them in separate paragraphs. Avoid mixing different ideas in the same paragraph.

Task Achievement

Address all parts of the task evenly. The letter could better explain why a camping holiday would be enjoyable, by giving specific reasons and examples, and by more thoroughly discussing the possible disadvantages.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

143 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
inherent
foster
distractions
cost-effective
unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
researching
campsite
lasting memories
mutual interests

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