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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above illustrates the
percentage
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 of
urban
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the urban
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population
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 in six countries including
Africa
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, Asia, Europe, Latin
America
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/
Carribean
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Caribbean
, North
America
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, and Oceania. The
population
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percentage
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 changes
was
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 observed in three periods of time; 1950, 2007, and 2050. What is clear from the data is by the year 2050, people who will be
leaving
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living
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 in urban areas will increase, with North
America
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take
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taking
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 the lead
of
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in
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 having the post
population
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.
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,
Africa
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 was and still will have the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 of people living in cities. Units are measured in
percentage
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. Through the three time
period
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periods
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,
Africa
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 and Asia have the most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 changes.
Africa
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 started with 15% of
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population
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the population
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, and Asia started with 17%. It
then
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rise
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rose
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 dramatically with almost
20
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a 20
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% difference to 2007, and will continue to rise and reach 62% and 66% respectively by 2050. Europe and Latin
America
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also
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 had the same
percentage
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 of change
of
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in
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population
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 from 1950 to 2007, before it will slow down to 12% of change in the future. Contrary
for
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to
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 North
America
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 and Oceania, both had the least changes in
population
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. They had the most
population
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 of people that
lives
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lived
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 in urban
area
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areas
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 in 1950 (64% and 62% respectively) , but
then
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increase
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increased
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 slowly and is predicted to rise only three-quarters of its initial figure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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