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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above illustrates the
percentage
 of
urban
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the urban
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population
 in six countries including
Africa
, Asia, Europe, Latin
America
/
Carribean
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Caribbean
, North
America
, and Oceania. The
population
percentage
 changes
was
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were
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 observed in three periods of time; 1950, 2007, and 2050. What is clear from the data is by the year 2050, people who will be
leaving
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living
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 in urban areas will increase, with North
America
take
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taking
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 the lead
of
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in
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 having the post
population
.
In contrast
,
Africa
 was and still will have the
least
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lowest
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percentage
 of people living in cities. Units are measured in
percentage
. Through the three time
period
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periods
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,
Africa
 and Asia have the most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 changes.
Africa
 started with 15% of
population
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the population
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, and Asia started with 17%. It
then
rise
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rose
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 dramatically with almost
20
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a 20
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% difference to 2007, and will continue to rise and reach 62% and 66% respectively by 2050. Europe and Latin
America
also
 had the same
percentage
 of change
of
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in
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population
 from 1950 to 2007, before it will slow down to 12% of change in the future. Contrary
for
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to
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 North
America
 and Oceania, both had the least changes in
population
. They had the most
population
 of people that
lives
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lived
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 in urban
area
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areas
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 in 1950 (64% and 62% respectively) , but
then
increase
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increased
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 slowly and is predicted to rise only three-quarters of its initial figure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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