The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates two locations that are considered for a shopping complex in Brandfield.
Overall
, both locations are located near the City
Center, but while
location
1 is based in the northern side of the city
, the second location
is in the south-east
side. Both Correct your spelling
southeast
place
are Change to a plural noun
places
also
surrounded by ..?
The first location
is surrounded by roads, railways, and a river. To the north-west side of it, there's a housing estate for people that lives
in the Correct subject-verb agreement
live
city
, and the City
Center is placed
in the south. Not far to the west, there is a golf course and park for leisure activities.
Different from the first Verb problem
located
location
, the second place that
is considered to be Correct pronoun usage
which
shopping
mall is positioned near the industrial estate. There are Correct article usage
a shopping
also
roads and railways as a means of transportation to go to the area. Another striking difference is the golf course and park is located far from the area.Submitted by talsyif.salsabila on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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