in recent years, many small local shops have closed because customer travel to large shopping center or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?
During the twentieth century, as populations expanded and more people moved to the city, life changed in many ways, including how we go shopping.
While
previously people would purchase what they needed at small, local shops, by the end of the century people were primarily shopping at larger malls and superstores. This
essay will argue that it is neither a positive nor a negative development: in fact, it is simply a natural change.
The main argument against this
sort of change is that smaller outlets are run by individuals or families, whereas
large malls and supermarkets are operated by huge national or multinational conglomerates. Small business owners are being squeezed out of the market by these huge corporate entities. This
also
causes a situation where the personal aspect of smaller stores
is lost, and the high streets lose their character as department stores
that have been around for decades or longer. suddenly close. Each town begins to look more like the next.
However
, it is not all bad. These vast stores
offer far more choices and better prices than smaller ones. Deli could offer. In addition
, they specialize in customer service so although
they may not be. entirely personal, the staff are well-trained to deal with a wide variety of situations. These department stores
can offer a greater level of convenience for customers and cater to the population with disabilities more easily.
In conclusion, it is understandable that many communities are upset by the phenomenon of small showrooms. closing, but it is not necessarily a negative development. There are some positives to this
situation as well.Submitted by shevonsavidhu14 on
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