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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
the line graph presents the
much
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amount of
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money
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 spent on
book
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books
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 in some European
countries
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started
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from 1995 to 2005.
overall
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, Germany was a country which spent a lot of
money
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for
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on
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 paying books
initially
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, followed by France, Italy, and
Autria
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Austria
. Despite Austria
is
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being
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 less country of
money
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 spent on
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the book
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book
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books
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,
but
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surprisingly it
become
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 the 3rd at end of
year
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the year
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. In 1995 Germany spent 80
million
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, France approximately 55
million
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, Italy 50
million
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, and
Autria
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Austria
 30
million
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 US Dollars
,
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 and it increased
untill
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until
 1999. different from other
countries
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,
1997
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from 1997
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 to 1999 Italy was a country which decreased of spent
money
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 for books.
In
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From
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 1999 to 2003 all
countries
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 except Germany
has
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had
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 an
improving
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improvement in
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 spending dollars
dispite
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despite
 not really significant. started 2001 to 2005 the budget which
spent
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was spent
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 by all
countries
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were
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was
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 increasing
moreover
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 Austria. it grew dramatically passing Italy and spent around 30
million
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dolars
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dollars
and was the
most
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apply
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coountry
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country
 which spent
money
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for
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on
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 buying books.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, countries, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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