The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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much
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amount of

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money
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spent on
book
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books

It seems that book may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in some European
countries
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started
Verb problem
apply

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from 1995 to 2005.
overall
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, Germany was a country which spent a lot of
money
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for
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on

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paying books
initially
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, followed by France, Italy, and
Autria
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Austria

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. Despite Austria
is
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being

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less country of
money
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spent on
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the book

The noun phrase book seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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book
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books

It seems that book may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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,
but
Correct word choice
apply

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surprisingly it
become
Wrong verb form
became

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the 3rd at end of
year
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the year

The noun phrase year seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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. In 1995 Germany spent 80
million
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, France approximately 55
million
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, Italy 50
million
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, and
Autria
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Austria

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30
million
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US Dollars
,
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apply

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and it increased
untill
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until

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1999. different from other
countries
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,
1997
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from 1997

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to 1999 Italy was a country which decreased of spent
money
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for books.
In
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From

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1999 to 2003 all
countries
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except Germany
has
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had

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an
improving
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improvement in

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spending dollars
dispite
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despite

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not really significant. started 2001 to 2005 the budget which
spent
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was spent

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by all
countries
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were
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was

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increasing
moreover
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Austria. it grew dramatically passing Italy and spent around 30
million
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dolars
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dollars

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and was the
most
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apply

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coountry
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country

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which spent
money
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for
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on

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buying books.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, countries, million with synonyms.
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