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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
#amount #money #book #germany #france #austria
the line graph presents the
much
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amount of
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money
 spent on
book
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books
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 in some European
countries
started
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from 1995 to 2005.
overall
, Germany was a country which spent a lot of
money
for
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on
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 paying books
initially
, followed by France, Italy, and
Autria
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Austria
. Despite Austria
is
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 less country of
money
 spent on
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the book
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book
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books
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,
but
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surprisingly it
become
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 the 3rd at end of
year
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. In 1995 Germany spent 80
million
, France approximately 55
million
, Italy 50
million
, and
Autria
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Austria
 30
million
 US Dollars
,
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 and it increased
untill
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until
 1999. different from other
countries
,
1997
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 to 1999 Italy was a country which decreased of spent
money
 for books.
In
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 1999 to 2003 all
countries
 except Germany
has
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had
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 an
improving
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improvement in
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 spending dollars
dispite
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despite
 not really significant. started 2001 to 2005 the budget which
spent
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was spent
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 by all
countries
were
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was
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 increasing
moreover
 Austria. it grew dramatically passing Italy and spent around 30
million
dolars
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dollars
and was the
most
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coountry
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country
 which spent
money
for
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on
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 buying books.
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